A awkward looking kid is sitting on a bus, he's not creepy, just innocent looking. He overhears a girl in front of him talking to her friend about what she wants in a man. She wants someone good looking, spontaneous, friendly, etc. He gives this some pause, she gets off the bus, and he runs to catch the door to follow her. He catches up to her and explains that he heard everything she said. He believes that he is the right guy for her. He is healthy, good with people, and wants a caring relationship. His little brother looks up to him, he cares about social issues like Darfur, and can lift 200 pounds. He likes all kinds of music. The girl is taken aback, she tells him that it was all talk, she doesn't even know him. He pauses, realizing that he's made a fool of himself, she see's this, and asks him if he's going in her direction. "No", he says, referring to both her and the bus he prematurely got off of, "I'll wait for the next one".
Tuesday, January 22, 2008
Meanwhile, In Productive Town....
Ok, so I think I've figured out what I want to do as a final project. Here's the general story, let me know what you think, or if you've had a similar experience.
A awkward looking kid is sitting on a bus, he's not creepy, just innocent looking. He overhears a girl in front of him talking to her friend about what she wants in a man. She wants someone good looking, spontaneous, friendly, etc. He gives this some pause, she gets off the bus, and he runs to catch the door to follow her. He catches up to her and explains that he heard everything she said. He believes that he is the right guy for her. He is healthy, good with people, and wants a caring relationship. His little brother looks up to him, he cares about social issues like Darfur, and can lift 200 pounds. He likes all kinds of music. The girl is taken aback, she tells him that it was all talk, she doesn't even know him. He pauses, realizing that he's made a fool of himself, she see's this, and asks him if he's going in her direction. "No", he says, referring to both her and the bus he prematurely got off of, "I'll wait for the next one".
A awkward looking kid is sitting on a bus, he's not creepy, just innocent looking. He overhears a girl in front of him talking to her friend about what she wants in a man. She wants someone good looking, spontaneous, friendly, etc. He gives this some pause, she gets off the bus, and he runs to catch the door to follow her. He catches up to her and explains that he heard everything she said. He believes that he is the right guy for her. He is healthy, good with people, and wants a caring relationship. His little brother looks up to him, he cares about social issues like Darfur, and can lift 200 pounds. He likes all kinds of music. The girl is taken aback, she tells him that it was all talk, she doesn't even know him. He pauses, realizing that he's made a fool of himself, she see's this, and asks him if he's going in her direction. "No", he says, referring to both her and the bus he prematurely got off of, "I'll wait for the next one".
Monday Shoot Delayed Due To Sketchy Actress
Murder crossed my mind, but I decided on re-casting, and re-scheduling. Branden, I know your pain. Also, this gives me some more time to get feedback on my script. Help me out!
Saturday, January 19, 2008
Shooting A Script on Monday
So I'm getting back in the game, as they say, and I'm shooting this script. basically it's about saying no to people who take advantage of you. It's short and sweet, and I'd love a little feedback. Whatever crosses your mind, no one's read this, so I'm curious about everything people think about it. Don't worry, please be really honest.
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Ramen Script
By Oliver Anderson
1/19/2008
Boiling Ramen, all alone, Opening Credits
Shots of adding things to ramen, sits down begins to eat
Phone Rings
R walks over and picks up the phone
before she can speak
Y: Hey, it's me! I'm like 5 minutes away, I'm coming over OK?
R: Wait--- Cut off
R slowly hangs up the phone, begins to tidy up, just sits down and looks at soup, suddenly unappetizing
Knock on the door
R opens the door
Y gives a big, warm, unreturned hug
Y: So how have you been! You look great, Oh man, it's great to see you!
R: Yeah
Y: Do you have anything to eat? Man, I'm starving!
Y walks into the kitchen and starts going through the cabinets, grabbing bits of things and opening up boxes. R walks into the kitchen and stands in the door way, looking at everything,
R: So where have you been?
Y: Referring to a cookie
Wow, these are really great, here, try one
R: No, I'm good. So where have you been?
Y: Mouth full Yeah, yeah, it's been so amazing. I think I have pictures...
Goes into overstuffed backpack and starts pulling things out.
Showing photographs
Y: Yeah that's this funeral that I went to in Maryland
R: wow. You took pictures at a funeral?
Flipping to the next photo
Who's that
Y: That's Dave, I stayed with him in Connecticut for a couple days. Totally cool guy. He has this German Shepard, I think...Flips through more photos... There it is. Isn't it adorable?
R: Yeah. So what was Connecticut like?
Y: Boring. Yeah, but I was all over the place.
Walks out of the room, and then turns around
So let's talk about you! What's up, what have you been doing? Do you still hang out with Mike?
R: Mike?
Y: Yeah
R: Uhh, I don't know who that is...
Y: Wait, Mike? Seriously? Maybe I'm thinking of someone else.
R: Yeah.
Pause
R: So what were you doing?
Y: I just told you! I've been all over the place. You know, just hanging out.
R: You should have kept in touch.
Y: I know, Yeah, but whatever, I'm here now!
R: Yeah
Y looks around, starts looking through the bookcase
Y: Oh wow, no way, this is so cool
R: Which one? Oh yeah, I really like that stuff,
Y: Yeah totally, I love graffiti.
Flips through and sits down
Hey, can I borrow this?
R: Oh. Umm...
Pauses, Y takes pause to mean yes and starts to put it in her bag.
R: Actually, wait. I think I've given you enough.
Awkward
Y: Oh. Yeah sure, whatever,
R: yeah.
Short pause
Confident
Yeah.
There is silence as they look at each other a little awkwardly. Ethereal music comes on. We cut to a quick awkward hug goodbye and then Y leaves. We see R close the door, cut outside to Y walking away down the sidewalk.
Credits.
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Ramen Script
By Oliver Anderson
1/19/2008
Boiling Ramen, all alone, Opening Credits
Shots of adding things to ramen, sits down begins to eat
Phone Rings
R walks over and picks up the phone
before she can speak
Y: Hey, it's me! I'm like 5 minutes away, I'm coming over OK?
R: Wait--- Cut off
R slowly hangs up the phone, begins to tidy up, just sits down and looks at soup, suddenly unappetizing
Knock on the door
R opens the door
Y gives a big, warm, unreturned hug
Y: So how have you been! You look great, Oh man, it's great to see you!
R: Yeah
Y: Do you have anything to eat? Man, I'm starving!
Y walks into the kitchen and starts going through the cabinets, grabbing bits of things and opening up boxes. R walks into the kitchen and stands in the door way, looking at everything,
R: So where have you been?
Y: Referring to a cookie
Wow, these are really great, here, try one
R: No, I'm good. So where have you been?
Y: Mouth full Yeah, yeah, it's been so amazing. I think I have pictures...
Goes into overstuffed backpack and starts pulling things out.
Showing photographs
Y: Yeah that's this funeral that I went to in Maryland
R: wow. You took pictures at a funeral?
Flipping to the next photo
Who's that
Y: That's Dave, I stayed with him in Connecticut for a couple days. Totally cool guy. He has this German Shepard, I think...Flips through more photos... There it is. Isn't it adorable?
R: Yeah. So what was Connecticut like?
Y: Boring. Yeah, but I was all over the place.
Walks out of the room, and then turns around
So let's talk about you! What's up, what have you been doing? Do you still hang out with Mike?
R: Mike?
Y: Yeah
R: Uhh, I don't know who that is...
Y: Wait, Mike? Seriously? Maybe I'm thinking of someone else.
R: Yeah.
Pause
R: So what were you doing?
Y: I just told you! I've been all over the place. You know, just hanging out.
R: You should have kept in touch.
Y: I know, Yeah, but whatever, I'm here now!
R: Yeah
Y looks around, starts looking through the bookcase
Y: Oh wow, no way, this is so cool
R: Which one? Oh yeah, I really like that stuff,
Y: Yeah totally, I love graffiti.
Flips through and sits down
Hey, can I borrow this?
R: Oh. Umm...
Pauses, Y takes pause to mean yes and starts to put it in her bag.
R: Actually, wait. I think I've given you enough.
Awkward
Y: Oh. Yeah sure, whatever,
R: yeah.
Short pause
Confident
Yeah.
There is silence as they look at each other a little awkwardly. Ethereal music comes on. We cut to a quick awkward hug goodbye and then Y leaves. We see R close the door, cut outside to Y walking away down the sidewalk.
Credits.
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